Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login
oh hi there by Syntactics

:iconplaya369:
There comes a time in every artists life when their work becomes... 'less' then what it once was. I've experienced this with writing, and some of my other, more secret talents. You just stop finding yourself improving, and start making little errors here and there. This picture, although it is well done, has many unfortunate errors.

The first one I noticed when observing detail is the young, blue maned colt's face. Now, to some, they would question what's wrong. I've seen you make better eyes, noses and mouths than those, Syn. The way you made this unicorn was just off. And it's not just his face. It's also his hind leg that doesn't look natural, his neck is too skinny looking, at least to me and the only thing that really makes and saves you from losing almost two stars on vision is the fact that the other is done much more nicely.

With this one, the picture took a while to load, so it was that slow, anticipating line moving slowly down to reveal the picture, and while it did, I fell in love with this yellow mane you drew. It feels very Hawaiian, and looks to move like smoke. His eyes, the real catcher for him, they were well done, and they don't look square like his flightless friend who seems to be thinking, "Huh?"

I remember back in my classes, my teacher would say that capturing the face, and making it have personality is one of the hardest, and important things to do with drawing, sculpting; you name it. But it can also be one of the funnest. With this, however, that colt's face tells me the artist didn't feel up to putting everything he had into this, the same way he'd put everything into his earlier art works.

Now, I'm not saying this was bad. It was very well done, and I adore it just as much as the next one, but you just hit a small slope. That's the great thing about those. You go down for a little while, but then you get right back up! I can already tell you're going to be going way up once you get out of that slope. I can tell that's where you are, too. You can thank this colts face for that. He could've been drawn much better, I just know it. But don't worry. The rest was wonderful. Especially the background.

I could tell you put some serious work into that, but maybe, a little too much. Next time, pace yourself and make sure the faces, eyes, and wings are all as good as the rest of the picture. I've noted that your ears are exceptional. You really know how to craft those correctly. You see, I've seen artists draw them and they come out looking like the pony has shovels instead! So bravo on being able to draw those almost as good as your manes.

Till the next critique request. Stay in touch.
The Artist thought this was FAIR
3 out of 3 deviants thought this was fair.

Comments


:iconsyntactics:
Syntactics Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I really want to thank you for all your critiques. If you want to know the truth, I think that is part of the reason I keep improving.

I already explained in the other response why I changed the style up, so I won't go into that here. I might experiment a little more, just to test stuff out, but hopefully I'll end up with a style that's tasteful both to me and everyone else.

Again, thank you so much for your honest critique!
Reply
Add a Comment: